YoYoExpert - Official Contest - #1

[Samad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/046-advanced-grinding.html

Next thing, this is advanced part two. We're going to deal with something called Grinding. It's cool looking. It involves getting......

Next thing, this is advanced part two. We're going to deal with something called Grinding. It's cool looking. Involves getting.....


You never said it


Also, the same video:

There are lots of different moves.

There's lots of different moves.

You never said are.

[Samad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/031-advanced-strong-throw.html
correction
So when you throw its kind of going back to the sleeper it sounds kind of silly for me to go back to that trick but practice your sleeper.

So when you throw its kind of going back to the sleeper it sounds somewhat silly for me to go back to that trick but practice your sleeper.

So when you throw its kind of going back to the sleeper it sounds kind of silly for me to go back to that trick but practice your sleeper.

The second one was incorrect. Also, on the same video, here:

You want it to be able to land on string without shooting back at your hand it's really important.

You want it to be able to land the string without it shooting back to your hand, it's really important.

[Samad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/047-advanced-slack-trapeze.html
Here is what it said: In yo-yoing there are different styles of play, when you see people on tricks.
Here is what you said: In yo-yoing there's different styles of play, when you see people on tricks.

Here is what it said: Pretend you have a little rock in your hand your actually going to take that rock and like just throw it over and notice how the string kind of floated over like that.

Here is the correction: Pretend you have like a little rock in your hand. You're actually going to take that rock and like just throw it over and notice how the string kind of floated over like that.



Also, I have a question. We are supposed to be matching what you are saying right? Cause I have noticed on some replies, that some words are changed from what you said anyway, so......yeah. Please answer back

[Trince]

Maintenance- Yo-Yo type

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/401-maintenance-yo-yo-types.html

1.So in yo-yoing today, you basically got two different shapes and three different types of yo-yo's.
Correction:
So, in yo-yoing today, you basically have to different shapes and three different types of yo-yo's.
2. The two shapes, which we've touched on before, is imperial® shaped, where it's kind of rounded.
correction
The two shapes, which we've touched on before, are imperial® shaped, where the yo-yo is kind of rounded
3.So two different shapes. You got butterfly and imperial®.
Correction:
So, you've got two different shapes, butterfly and imperial®.
4.Then you have three basic types of yo-yo's.
Correction:
Then, you have three basic types of yo-yo's.
5.When they say it's not like the yo-yo I used to use, that's because this is what they were using.
Correction:
When your grandfathers say "it's not like the yo-yo I used to use," that's because this is what your grandfathers were using.
6. It's basically-- this one even has a metal axle. A lot of the older ones were wood.
Correction:
This one even has a metal axle, a lot of the older ones were wood.
7. And so basically, it was spinning right around that.
Correction:
And so basically, the string was spinning right around that axle.
8. You've got a little plastic piece. It goes over the metal there.
Correction:
You've got a little plastic piece that goes over the metal axle.
9. The string goes on that and makes it spin.
Correction
The string goes on the transaxle and makes the yo-yo spin.
10. This one, the string goes around the bearing. And this helps keep that yo-yo spinning
Correction:
The string goes around the bearing and this bearing helps keep that yo-yo spinning
11. There's lots of improvements in yo-yoing. And this is mainly why all the tricks you see today are because of ball bearings.
Correction:
There are many improvements in yo-yoing. Almost all the tricks you see today are because of ball bearings.
12. That's the three basic types. We're going to get into the more specifics about them next.
Corrections
Those are the three basic types. We're going to get more specific about them next.

[Samad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/086-master-and-whut.html

Part 1, here is what the text said: You want to try and do this in one fluent movement, so I'm going to show you real quick what I mean by that.

Here is what you said: You want to try and do this in one fluent movement, so let me show you real quick what I mean by that.

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/086-master-and-whut.html

Part 3, here is what the text said: I highly suggest watching each part a couple of times,
Here is what you said: I highly suggest watching each part a couple times,

[wes]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/005-basic-gravity-pull.html

Corrections:
1. The string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your knuckle and your fingernail just like so.

You wanna put it the string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your knuckle and your fingernail just like so.

2. The string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your knuckle and your fingernail just like so.

The string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your two knuckles there, in between your nuckle and your fingernail just like so.

3.

[Kim-Lan]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/018-intermediate-man-flying-trapeze.html

Original: Okay, next trick is man on the flying trapeze.
Correction: Okay, next trick is the Man on the Flying Trapeze.

Original: A lot of people call this just trapeze abbreviated, it's pretty cool.
Correction: A lot of people call this just Trapeze abbreviated. It's pretty cool

Original: The trick itself is another trick where you want to practice.
Correction: The trick itself is another trick where you want to practice.

Original: You want this strong because a lot of the tricks we're going to be working on I'm just going to say you do a trapeze, so you have to know it.
Correction: You want to get this strong, because a lot of the tricks we're going to be working on I'm just going to say, "You do a Trapeze." So, you have to know it.

Original: What you do is you start with a breakaway.
Correction: What you do is you start with a Breakaway.

Original: Then just get it back to your hand.
Correction: And then you just get it back to your hand.

Original: That's called man on the flying trapeze.
Correction: That's called Man on the Flying Trapeze.

Original: What you want to do is you throw a strong breakaway like so and instead of catching it when it's at your shoulder, take your non-throw hand, bring your pointer finger out.
Correction: What you want to do is you throw a strong Breakaway like so, and instead of catching it when it's at your shoulder, take your non-throw hand. Bring your pointer finger out.

Original: The yo-yo is going to go under your pointer finger.
Correction: And the yo-yo is going to go under your pointer finger.

Original: It's going to shoot around it and that's what brings is onto the string.
Correction: It's going to shoot around it and that's what brings it onto the string itself.

Original: As it's coming across, you bring your pointer as close to the yo-yo as possible.
Correction: And as it's coming across, you bring your pointer as close to the yo-yo as possible.

Original: It's really impressive.
Correction: I mean it's really impressive.

Original: From there, the yo-yo is actually going to shoot down into your hand.
Correction: And from there, the yo-yo is actually going to shoot down into your hand.

Original: You want to pop it up and then have your hand open underneath.
Correction: So you want to pop it up and then have your hand open underneath.

Original: It's something you can work on.
Correction: It's something that you can work on.

Original: That's man flying the trapeze.
Correction: And that's Man on the Flying Trapeze.

[Samad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/060-expert-skin-the-gerbil.html
PART 1
Here is what the text said: If you can get it down fast and smooth you can really impress people.

Here is the correction: If you can get it down fast and smooth it's gonna really impress people


Here is what the text said: You want to take your throw hand and turn it in towards yourself like that and then you push in on the string hair.

here is the correction: You want to take your throw hand and turn it in towards yourself like that and then you push in on the string here.

Text: Let's try this again. So you take it, push in, come double around, come back around, double up on the other side. One more time then we're going to break down the next part in the next segment.

Correction: Let's try this again. So you take it, push in, come double around, come back around, double up on the other side. M'Kay. One more time then we're going to break down the next part in the next segment.

PART 2

Text: So we've gone this far. We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back and we are here.

Correction: So we've gotten this far. We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back and we're here.


Text: The next step isn't too bad. You are actually just missing once and bringing it back over like so and undoing that

Correction: The next step isn't too bad. You are actually just missing once and bringing it back over like so and then undoing that



text: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.

correction: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.

[yoyoman]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/063-expert-revolutions.html
corrections:
it's really cool-looking
it's really cool looking
a coulple of times "Revolutions" is not capitalized (not sure if this is correct are not but at the end it is capitalized.)

[yoyoman]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/214-offstring-volcano.html
corrections:
the tenses are wrong and keep changing (the real key...)
"shoot" is in the wrong tense
after "throw" all you need is a comma
"coming" is the wrong tense
"and that's volcano" at the end is a fragment
the second sentence needs a point of reference (for example "one" could be changed to the word trick)
the sentence "what it looks like is this" is a fragment
 

[Kim-Lan]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/060-expert-skin-the-gerbil.html
PART 1
Here is what the text said: If you can get it down fast and smooth you can really impress people.

Here is the correction: If you can get it down fast and smooth it's gonna really impress people


Here is what the text said: You want to take your throw hand and turn it in towards yourself like that and then you push in on the string hair.

here is the correction: You want to take your throw hand and turn it in towards yourself like that and then you push in on the string here.

Text: Let's try this again. So you take it, push in, come double around, come back around, double up on the other side. One more time then we're going to break down the next part in the next segment.

Correction: Let's try this again. So you take it, push in, come double around, come back around, double up on the other side. M'Kay. One more time then we're going to break down the next part in the next segment.

PART 2

Text: So we've gone this far. We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back and we are here.

Correction: So we've gotten this far. We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back and we're here.


Text: The next step isn't too bad. You are actually just missing once and bringing it back over like so and undoing that

Correction: The next step isn't too bad. You are actually just missing once and bringing it back over like so and then undoing that



text: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.

correction: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.

Part 1
Original: It's a really smooth.
Correction: It's really smooth.

Original: To start off "Skin the Gerbil" you land on a trapeze.
Correction: To start off "Skin the Gerbil," you land on Trapeze.

Original: It makes it swing way around like that.
Correction: It makes it swing right around like that.

Original: It's kind of like a backwards brain twister.
Correction: It's kind of like a backwards Brain Twister.

Original: That's the first step of "Skin the Gerbil".
Correction: That's the first step of "Skin the Gerbil."

Part 2
Original: Skin the gerbil one more time looks like this.
Correction: Skin the Gerbil, one more time, looks like this.

Original: It is a really nice smooth flowing trick.
Correction: It is a really nice, smooth, flowing trick.

Original: When you do skin the gerbil, one of the things that you really want to think about is get your ears spinning fast, get it smooth and keep it dead center on a string.
Correction: When you do Skin the Gerbil, one of the things that you really want to think about, get your yo-yo spinning fast. Get it smooth and keep it dead center in the string.

Original: We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back around and we are here.
Correction: We've hit the string, we went under, doubled up, brought it back around, and we're here.

Original: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.
Correction: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, where we're here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand pointer.

Original: You come around and hit there; that's the end of part 1.
Correction: You come back around, hit there; that's the end of part 1.

Original: You undo that and come around and miss.
Correction: And then you undo that. You come around and miss.

Original: All you are doing is missing
Correction: So all you are doing is missing.

Original: You land onto the string.
Correction: And then you land it onto the string.

Original: Very simple. Unroll, unroll, unroll and catch and then that is skin the gerbil.
Correction: Then you simply unroll, unroll, you're back in Trapeze, unroll, and catch. And then that is Skin the Gerbil.

[Kim-Lan]

This is not really a correction, but I did it anyways..

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/001-basic-yo-yo-types.html

Alright, in yo-yoing, there's two basic shapes. You have something called an imperial® shape. It's kind of a rounded shape, like this one here. And this is called a butterfly shape. It kind of tapers open from the gap. There's two main reasons why we have two shapes of yo-yos. The imperial® shaped yo-yo is actually made for a style of tricks called looping. A lot of times in a competition setting, people will be doing it with two hands. They look like this and the reason they're shaped like that is it's easier for the string to grab the gap, because the gap is all the way tight from the bottom to the top. And it's also easier to control when you're shooting it back out. You're going to see that in the next segment. The butterfly shape tapers open like so. Simply because it's more made for string tricks where you're actually going to be landing the string into the groove of the yo-yo. You can do tricks where you're bouncing it around on the string. You know, it's going to be sleeping. You're going to see a lot of that stuff in the next segment and that's what we're going to be focusing on throughout these yo-yo segments itself. There is also--This is called an Offstring yo-yo. Notice it has a rubber edge to it. It's a similar shape to the other butterfly yo-yo, but with this one here, with the rubber, it makes it a little bit wider. So it's a little bit easier to catch, because this one you actually play with not connected to the string. If it falls on the ground, it'll bounce. It's easier to catch and it's more durable. And that's, for the most part, the three basic shapes in yo-yoing today.

[Kim-Lan]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/003-basic-yo-yo-string.html

Original:
Correction: Now we're going to talk about yo-yo string. Now, yo-yos, you need a string attached in some form. And string is important.

Original: There's actually many different kinds of yo-yo strings.
Correction: There's actually many different kinds of yo-yo string.

Original: A basic yo-yo string is actually 2 strands of strong twisted together.
Correction: A basic yo-yo string is actually 2 strands of string twisted together.

Original: This is string is all set for me because it's just about my height.
Correction: This string is all set for me, because it's just about my height.

Original: That's the basic of yo-yo string.
Correction: And that's the basics of yo-yo string.

[jawad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/041-advanced-buddhas-revenge.html
correction

The one and a half mount is kind of a stalled double or nothing doesn't go the whole way around it comes one and a half times around and lands on that string underneath.

The one and a half mount is a kind of stalled double or nothing doesn't go the whole way around it comes one and a half times around and lands on that string underneath.

correction
It's kind of a cool looking trick.

It's a kind of cool looking trick.
correction

When you?re all done with it you roll and dismount into a trapeze, which you just missed.

When you're all done with it you roll and dismount into a trapeze, which you just missed.

correction
So let me show that motion again.

So let me show that motions again.
correction

And that's "Buddha?s Revenge."

And that's "Buddha's Revenge."

[jawad]

http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/042-advanced-eli-hops.html
correction
It?s a cool trick and it takes a little bit of practice but it is not as complicated as some of the string tricks we were just doing.

It's a cool trick and it takes a little bit of practice but it is not as complicated as some of the string tricks we were just doing.

correction

It?s worth doing because it helps get you consecutive in the string and its cool looking.

It's worth doing because it helps get you consecutive in the string and its cool looking.

correction


When you get on the stage and do this people will really like this move.

When you get on the stage and do this, people there will really like the move.

correction
It's a cool trick, it launches the yo-yo all the way up the string and you just basically catch it again.

It's a cool trick, it launches the yo-yo all the way up the string and you just catch it again.

correction
Start with the trapeze, you bring you hands together just like the mount we were working on before you pull them apart very fast and this is what launches the yo-yo up into the air.

Start with the trapeze, you bring your hands together just like the mount we were working on before you pull them apart very fast and this is what launches the yo-yo up into the air.



correction
It goes all the way up and you just basically pull your throw hand backwards, it kind of pulls the yo-yo back down to the earth and back towards the string.

It goes all the way up and you just pull your throw hand backwards, it kind of pulls the yo-yo back down to the earth and back towards the string.

correction
If you keep your hand straight and keep the yo-yo strings straight lined up with it as you pull back that hand the yo-yo should come pretty straightforward.

If you keep your hand straight and keep the yo-yo strings straight lined up with it as you pull back, that hand the yo-yo should come pretty straightforward


correction
It is definitely worth it and if you pull your string back like that you?re definitely more likely to hit it.

It is definitely worth it and if you pull your string back like that you're definitely more likely to hit it.

correction
If you?re trying to catch it all the way over there, you might not catch it every time

If you're trying to catch it all the way over there, you might not catch it every time


   

correction

So the closer you can bring that yo-yo to your finger you?re going to be hitting it more often.

So the closer you can bring that yo-yo to your finger you're going to be hitting it more often.